Hi Everyone!

I've been learning Japanese on and off for the past few years, and I've recently began to dive into writing/reading Japanese poetry, specially haikus.

I've written some haikus in Japanese, but I want to make sure that the syntax makes sense and that they actual 'sound' poetic and not merely an incoherent collection of characters. Note: I stuck to the 5-7-5 morae rule for the Japanese versions of course, but my English translations don't always follow the right syllable count.

Haiku 1

今日の火の     （きょのひの）

事思い出す     （ことおもいだす）

過去の夏        （かこのなつ）

Today’s fire

Reminds me of 

past summers

Haiku 2

あの人の (あのひとの）

事思い出す        (ことおもいだす)

枯葉かな (かれはかな)

I am reminded

Of that person when I see

the dead Autumn leaves

Haiku 3

森林や （しんりんや） 

ちょっと迷った  （ちょっとまよった）

天の川                 （あまのがわ）

Within the forest

I lost myself for a while

In the Milky Way

This is my first post ever on this forum, so I would appreciate any feedback anyone could provide. Thank you!