SOP Tips

Hey everyone. I recently had a friend read my essay after editing it down to 2 pages. My friend gave me feedback, and specifically told me to have better transition sentences/flow more smoothly. She had also said that my essay read like bullet points.

I had come with the idea of having my essay straight forward to lay down all my cards since there isn't much space. Any tips or feedback to this?

by Familiar_Arm_7328